Friday, August 1, 2014

Annotating Dracula

  I downloaded Bran Stoker’s Dracula off e-book dreading having to pay for another temporary required text for a semester. I tried to read the book on the train but reading from my phone and tablet was very taxing on my eyes and rereading the digital copy didn’t really help for me to understand the text. Some helpful tools reading the novel on e-book had was highlighting with many colors and that you can embed a comment section which would help with my annotation. The comment would also help with piecing the diaries timeline throughout the novel together. I wasn’t getting anywhere with the digital copy and decided to look Dracula in the school’s library. You’d be surprised how much of a difference having a hard copy of the book in your hands. Once I started reading the hard copy of Dracula I started flying through the chapters and it actually started to make sense because I didn’t have to strain my eyes to focus on the text. I would read the chapters on the train on my way to school instead sitting idle and catching eyes with a stranger. I would also read before bed. My method of annotation is with sticky notes reading through the chapters and writing down any peculiar event or actions. At the end of the chapter I would place the summary of notes and the pages on which the events happened in the chapter.
Before reading the Bram Stocker’s Dracula, I had actually forgotten the origins of Dracula and his weaknesses because in modern day vampires didn’t have weakness of the crucifix or garlic, now it was to stake a vampire in the chest or trap them in sunlight. Modern day vampires aren’t as intellectual or clever like in Dracula. Dracula still has the primal instinct of lust throughout the novel but he has an odd control of the weather such as in Chapter 7 in the Demeter. There’s magically a fog on a ship carrying soil as cargo. Throughout the nights on the ships voyage to London men go missing when they’re out on watch. To stop the hysteria from spreading the captain decides to search the ship and when they found nothing it placed their minds at ease until another sailor gone missing and the storm and fog had gotten worse. One of the last few sailors committed suicide than to allow the unknown entity kill him. The captain documented everything as he could until his strength left him as he tied himself to the wheel. When the ship crashed into the pier the storm had disappeared altogether and a massive black dog was seen coming off the ship. So not only can Dracula manipulate the weather he also can transform into a dog? One thing that still puzzles me is Lucy started sleep walking because of Dracula but when exactly did she come into contact with him for her to be charmed. In chapter 8 when Lucy sleep walks and Mina finds her on the hill that they always sit to find a shadowy figure bent over her. As Mina makes her way to Lucy the figure disappears leaving her exhausted, breathing heavy, and moaning in extreme detail as if she has performed a sexual act with Dracula which precedes the downfall of Lucy’s transformation.

Wednesday, July 30, 2014

                                                        Fancy way of  writing
Chapter 14 in They Say, I Say is about writing in the social science by Erin Ackerman, as students in academic writing how to be discipline in our writings by applying these norms showing the characteristics expected of a good academic writing. Which has been told and show in class but did not put in application. Such as, before using or adding our owns thoughts, we have given enough respect to the writers by letting explain freely his point before ours owns thoughts and opinions. For past few weeks we have been practice academic writing, kind of complicated but not much similarities of what has already been doing in class. The social science inform the discipline in writing’s expectation, which they make a claim or thesis and creating new ideas.


Monday, July 28, 2014

Analyzing the Sciences and other Academic Fields

   In chapter 13 of "They Say, I Say", the authors discuss the process by which writing in the sciences is heavily based on creating arguments and then backing them up with proof. While they point out that science-based subjescts are usually misinterpreted as "facts" they state that most of the time, a scientific study is not known as a fact, unless in a few circumstances where there is a massive amount of scientific data supporting something, all found by different scientists. Since science is dificult to prove as an absolute, the process by which a scientist forms an argument for a scientific data includes three stages; Showing data, explaining methods, and summarizing the findings.
    In The first stage, the experimenter is not only citing numbers, but describing prevailing theories about the subject in question, and the evidence that supports it. Next, one must explain the methods of producing ones findings. This is to establish credibility for the data. Then, one must also summarize the findings, which is ultimately a witten desripion of the data and how it is evident proof for an argument.
      By analyzing science in these stages, it becomes easier to back up arguments, and show evidence for your arguments to others. This process also allows the experimenter to acknowledge naysayers, and explain why despite critiques of a certain theory from other scientists, that there is enough supporting evidence to conclude that one's hypothesis is corrct.
      This semester in English 24, we wrote several essays that included the use of stating an argument, stating the evidence to support that argument, and then acknowlodging an argument that might be used by someone with an opposing view. Although the subjects that were tackled were unrelated to the hard sciences, many of the steps used to support an argument in class were the same as if we were arguing for a scientific finding. However, instead of creating our own experiments, we mostly either agreed or disagreed with a view that was included in an article or book. We then found other scholarly articles which we used to support or debunk that claim, depening on our own personal stance.
      Despite not creating the experiment per se, we did use a lot of "data" from experiences that we gained throughout our lives. For example, if I was writing about television making us smarter, I would use my past experiences with television as a way of establishing some of my own cedibility. By having experience in the topic of debate, and by finding several sources that support your claim, and then findin flaws in articles that oppose you, one can then form a solid evidence based argument.

-The diagram above illustrates the circlular motion of the scientific method, which is how scientists create arguments by using past evidence and observations to hypothesize about future occurences. This model not only applys to science, but to any good argument, which inclues a claim, and evidence and other suporters to back it up. (

Writing for the Social Sciences

  In the chapter I've been assigned discussing writing for socialism and the best methods of summarizing the author's ideas and correctly placing your ideas and if you agree, disagree or agree to disagree with the author.
     The introduction is an important part of writing for the social sciences. It's a breakdown of what you'll be talking about within the essay itself. Another aspect of the social sciences is separating your idea from the author. If you stop at the "they say" your readers won't know what you're talking about and especially in interrupting the words of the author the reader will wonder why you have to say anything at all.
The chapter also gives templates on how to agree on some parts of an article as well as disagree. I will use an example for my third essay on "Public Health" using one of the templates provided in this chapter provided on page 160 (They Say/I Say)
    Although I agree with Radley Balko up to a point, I cannot accept his overall conclusion that if we allow the government to regulate what we eat that we'll allow them into other aspects of our daily lives.
   It is also important to summarize the key components of your article that will help you with your analysis of the topics. Using direct quotes from the author helps to represent them fairly as well. In your analysis of the topic you have will want to expand on how you have formed your opinion and why others should care about your topic. Even if you have an abundance of data and cover all the bases there will still be someone out there who disagrees, and that's okay what is important is that you show you've done the work and that you represented the author's work fairly and you present your argument as part of an ongoing conversation.
    I find this chapter helpful for my finally essay because I have multiple sources and I want to represent the author's idea fairly. What will really help me is the questions I ask in my essay and the templates provided in the chapter for making your point and answering the questions.

” Writing in the social science”

In the chapter 13 of They say, I say,” Writing in the social science” by Erin Ackerman, discusses the overall experience of writing in the social science. It explains that social science is the study of human interactions and the organizations that make these interactions easier. Writing in social science requires people to include their thoughts in their dialogs by demonstrating their thoughts about what they think. Including thoughts expressed by others in their dialog is very important, as it will allow them to test what they and others have along side of a review of data. Social writing includes an Introduction, Thesis, a literature review, and the writer’s own analysis, which also includes presentation of data and consideration of the conclusion of thesis and the parts that make it up as well (Ackerman158).
Writing for social science requires a person to include their thoughts in dialogs by showing their thoughts about their way of thinking. Social Science essays that are well written will always consist of an introduction, Thesis, a review of a literature and analysis. These components were also used in class when we had papers to do. In my English 24 class we incorporated our thoughts in our writing but only to an extent. Most of the writing that we did focused more on connecting our research to our claims, which derives from our analysis of a literature. I learned how to annotate by highlighting the texts, this allowed me to separate the thoughts and ideas of the author from the rest of the texts. I feel that annotating by highlighting the texts can be applicable to writing for social science. Writing for Social science allows people have more freedom share their opinion more in their writhing.    


Sunday, July 27, 2014

Obesity Starts In Adolescence

  In Radley Balko's article What You Eat Is Your Business", he states that the obesity rate in the United States is increasing because we allow health to be a "public" issue and enforce it by providing social medicines. He mentions that the government should not have to get involved in order for us to take our health into our own hands, he states,
"The best way to alleviate obesity 'public health" crisis is to remove obesity from the realm of public health(397).He goes to mention that thoughts who "let themselves go" should be punished as for those who take care of themselves should be punished. David McDonald a local pediatrician of the article "Challenging Ronald McDonald versus McDonald's would dis extreme measures.
In David McDonald article bring up the topic of obesity children. He states," The major of obese children will remain obese throughout their lives"(103).  He goes in depth of how comes about, such as popular chains like McDonald's building their restraint near a middle school in his hometown. The McDonald wanted to be built over a local pharmacy but because of David and local residents was McDonald's proposal was declined.
Government may step in to help with social medicines and "public health" but they need to enforce better preventions against big fast food chains like McDonald's. Obesity starts in children before it can proceed into adulthood and stopping corporations like McDonald's and building them away from schools will make a difference

Writing in English 24 and in the Social Sciences

In chapter 14 “Analyze this” Erin Ackerman, Discusses the elements that go into writing in the Social Sciences, these elements are, the introduction and thesis, the literature review and finally, the analysis. She explains that the social sciences are the study of people how they act and relate with each other. She claims that as a student of the social sciences, it’s not only your voice and opinions that are important and relevant, you are not alone. According to Ackerman “In other words, you’ll need to start with what others say and then present what you say as a response” (176) to be a good writer you need to be able show what other people have said, about the topic you might be writing about, in other words the ‘They say’ in a conversation. Writing in the social sciences includes a lot of data and explaining if you agree, disagree or if you believe that the data is incorrect or the data doesn't include all the relevant point in a specific topic. Ackerman also explains how it’s common in the social sciences to summarize a lot of different arguments in a single paragraph. She believes it’s very important to not only paraphrase but to include direct quotations of what others have said, and give credit to the original source. In the analysis of a social sciences paper, you must define your data, show where you got the data, and explain what you've done with the data. Ackerman also explains that you should include a naysayer to give other people’s views, and a “why should they care?” because in the social sciences “it’s important to include how your research may affect the assumptions we make about human behavior” (Ackerman 190). Basically you need to include a ‘why should they care’ because it may help how other people continue the conversation, and it shows who it may be affecting.

I believe that writing in the social sciences is very similar to writing in English 24. I believe this because like in the social sciences, in English 24 the writing we do a lot of the time is thesis driven (our claim), you also have to include a ‘they say’, bringing in different sources to help analyze a specific topic, or like in our class a piece of our pop culture. In our English class we also have agree, disagree or both with someone’s argument and include why and how that relates to our argument, and in our final essay we have to include a naysayer to give voice to the other side of the conversation like they do in the social sciences writing. One of the differences in writing in the social sciences and writing in English is that they use more statistics to prove their point. Also it’s important to give appropriate credit to the sources we use. 
I chose this picture because writing in  H.S. English classes is so much more different and has a totally different purpose than what I've noticed in college. 

Scientific writing is something else

The reading " The data suggest", "writing in the science" by Christopher Gilles, I as a reader understand that the scientific writing is more complex, harder in my opinion but in deed easier to understand. Scientific writing is about giving as many evidence and data to the reader, so the reader can understand step by step.  Scientific writing is similar as the kind of writing I follow in class, taking a side of an argument and give as much evidence and critical analysis as possible. This style of writing is not easy because you must follow steps such as writing about data and discussing a scientific argument. Also to present a prevailing theory, the writer must  make sure the reader understand the prevailing theory or such theory before the writer can go in detail. Scientific writing also goes through the same process a writer goes through, which is going through "several level of critical analysis before being published" (Gilles 314)
Scientific writing sounds so professional, when ever I hear or read the term science I always think of data, chemistry and life. To be able to apply this kind of presionalism in writing makes my head hurt, because then I would have to give evidence, and be as detailed as possible I mean I already apply is to my writing in class but he fact that it has to be very specific and writing data not by numbers but follow a formate and have a theorie and apply that works to the world and explain it, that sounds hard in a way.  This kind of writing I am accustom to is very different and the same, both writing techniques have to do with a side argument, but scientific writing doesn't argue but gives data to better the understanding of the reader. I must say that reading this article has given me some knowledge but I wouldn't like to write in this kind of format. I dislike it and just by thinking about it makes my had hurt, I much rather stay with the basic format Of English writing

Analyze This -- Social Sciences

In Chapter 14, "Analyze This", in They Say/ I Say, Erin Ackerman discusses writing which lead towards socializing with our peers on a certain topic. Social writing has been brought up in class and in our essays when we go in depth on our subject and show our opinions if we agree or disagree with the author's statement. When we agree or disagree with the author's statement, we are bringing in the "I say" part into our text. We also have to let another person show their ideas on what you have to say. While stating our claim, we have to let the reader say what they have to say in response to what the writer says. If you don't let the reader express his/her views, you'll lose credibility and it makes your statement seem bias. For example, if you're discussing with friends about alcohol abuse in the United States and only explain your ideas while not letting them share their thoughts on the matter, it'll seem that only your thoughts matter, not theirs. Whenever you are sharing your thoughts on an idea, you have to let people share their thoughts as well. 

I think that I can use social science in ENG 24 and on a everyday bases. Whenever people discuss on arguable topics like who should have won the World Cup or what would you bring to survive a zombie apocalypse,  you can discuss your side on how did should have been and also let another person show their claim. While writing an essay, while discussing how you feel about the author's statement, you should also let the reader that is your text say something as well.  It will make your essay look reasonable and it will also show who actually cares about what you have to say.

Knowledge is Power

In Gerald Graff's Hidden Intellectualism, Graff proves that intellect does not only exist in the scholarly form of thinking. Graff claims that knowledge can also take the form of "street smarts."
My form of “street smarts” is knowing about cars. Have you ever opened the hood of your car and wondered what was going on in there? A car engine can look like a big confusing jumble of metal, tubes and wires to the uninitiated. You might want to know what's going on simply out of curiosity. Or perhaps you are buying a new car, and you hear things like 3.0 liter V-6, over head cams and tuned port fuel injection. What does all of that mean? One cold and rainy night my girlfriend and I were stuck in the middle of the highway. We were just coming back from a nice dinner when our car shut off. As the car was decreasing in spend we pulled over to the shoulder lane. My girlfriend was over reacting because the scenery disturbed her. This took place in the middle of the highway around tress that where shaking because of the wind and rain. She tired calling for help but she had no service. Little did she know I was familiar with cars. So I went in the engine bay and tried to find out what went wrong. After 30 mins of randomly looking I found out that the spark plug wire detached. So I plugged it back in and tried on the car and it worked.
Knowing about cars can save people money and also same them time. For example if this happened to someone who did not know about engines. They would of called a tow truck and spent money on a mechanic because of a simple plug that was unplugged. Graff takes the idea of taking street-smart topics and turning them into intellectual debates. His stance describes a culture that joins common subjects that can be discussed and viewed in different ways

Scientific writing VS. all

In the thirteenth chapter of  TSIS, Christopher Gillen teaches us that the facts derived from the data while doing scientific research is the backbone for writing in the sciences. This particular chapter focuses on the steps needed for writing a scientific paper. It teaches us the writing used for scientific writing. It gives a step by step on how to write a scientific paper, what to focus on and how to present the information. This specific type of writing starts with the data, then present theories. In scientific writing the author needs to explain what the data means. You need to explain what “they say,” and then express what “you say” about the data and then use it to make an argument. Scientists develop hypothesis from existing data and then test those by comparing their predictions to new experimental data.  Summarizing data is a basic move in this type of writing, because data can be interpreted in many different ways. Therefore describing the data opens doors to critical analysis. Gillen tells us that the 3 steps in describing data is to present prevailing theories, explain methods and then summarize the findings, which means provide the context needed to understand the results. In such writing, scientists must make and defend claims. In order to write a scientific paper one must know what “they say” about a certain topic, then use your knowledge to either agree, disagree or both.

            The writing we have done this semester wasn’t all that different than the writing done in the sciences. In this course we learned about taking a certain text, summarizing it then bring in our own argument into it and analyze the certain reading so we could get a better understanding of it. So to in scientific writing, it’s all about summarizing data then present theories. I think we have been using the same steps as writing in the sciences for this class. For examples all the blogs, essays and in-class presentations/assignments, we had to first summarize the text, then later make your own argument by either disagreeing, agreeing or both. Just like in scientific writing, one must explain the data and then use that data to make your own argument.

Below are the steps for writing in the sciences.


Understanding the Sexism in Dracula

Understanding the Sexism in Dracula
the reference I selected is chapter 5, the letters and diary entries amongst Mina and Lucy. Lucy and Mina talk about their individual romances. Mina discusses how she is grateful that her fiancé is coming back home. Furthermore Lucy replies with stories about her own marriage views. She received proposals from 4 men, which are Dr. John Seward, Quincey Morris and Arthur Holmwood, whose proposal she has accepted.
This reference shows both Lucy and Mina’s letters towards each other. Lucy argues the difference between men and woman. She states “My dear Mina, why are men so noble when we women are so little worthy of them?” she is asking the question why must men be more overlooked then women. Lucy is questioning the Victorian society. I chose this reference to show the idea of sexism from the Victorian times because when both Lucy and Mina were writing to each other, they expressed their characters in a way that was naturally different from other Victorian woman. Lucy also exposes that she is a sexualized being in the letters. Lucy gets three marriage proposals in a single day, but she can only pick one, which has her wondering; “Why can’t they let a girl marry three men, or as many as want her, and save all this trouble?” Lucy takes her word back, since women in Victorian society is not able to promote her character in such ways. In her apology she states her words as “heresy” which means opinion opposing to orthodox religious. Lucy was a young lady who wanted more out of life then other women at the time. Lucy kept referring to the idea of “New Woman" in the letters. This was a term used for women who wanted to be free of Victorian restrictions. The new woman metaphor is evil. The novel shows us how Mina and Lucy talking about being a new woman and shows us where that lead them to. Lucy was very sexual and seductive. She desired 4 men by her side. By her having these traits she ended up dying. Stokers message was an act of being sexual from a lady would lead her to her death

In the novel there was acts of sexism towards men additionally. In a since in the novel Jonathan was up ducted by Dracula. Dracula was controlling Jonathan and taking advantage of him. Which took away his men hood. Jonathan realizes that he is a prisoner in Castle Dracula. He encounters three ghostly women there who seem ready to attack him but are driven away by Dracula “When I am done with him you shall kiss him at your will,” the count tells them. This shows how Dracula is in control of Jonathan. When this happened Mina, who was Jonathan’s wife almost, left him and thus caused him to go insane. The message stoker was saying is a man has to be manly. He has rules to follow: protecting his women, starting a family and be adventures and has to be smart. If a man does not follow these rules in the novel it shows us the bad things that happen to a man.

I Use This Way to Say it!

 In the Chapter 13 "The Data Suggest", "Writing in the Sciences" by Christopher Gillen, he starts with certain studies about developping the comprehension in analyzing and give our proposition out of it. He uses certain scientists researches to teach us how we may enjoy to express our opinion from what other "say". From these examples, he shows how to analyze what "they say" by using other sources as evidence.
     The objective of this passage is to teach us in some methods how to analyze the scientific writing. The author explains how we may use data as new experiments to summarize and comparing them with scientific writings. He uses certain maths method to describe what collecting data is about. Through this method, he draws in three rhetorical keys we can describe data in scientific writings. For examples, presenting the prevailing theories, explaining methodologies, and summarizing findings.
      In the method of presenting the prevailing theories, the author uses the explanation of Lighton's hypothesis to show how these theories work.
     In the explainig methodologies, he makes in evidence some techniques for readers to collect data. As a result, he presents a short passage about the evolution of bird digestive systems to desmontrate these methods.
    The author explains the method of "Summazing the Findings" by supporting information and making comparisons to different data. Once we summarize the data, he suggests us to say what the data mean and he explains this process as well in a scientific writing.
    He notes how important to make our own arguments and sharing our agreement that following by an explanation of this choice. He uses variuous of templates to describe those methods.
    All those approaches Gillen uses to make the program of collecting data is helpful to us for having a better view in writing performance, but it is somehow complicated. In order to understand all points that he describes in the this Chapter following by those practice templates, it is required us to be patient and being motivated in learning.
    I am impressed to see all of materials that I learned in ENG 24. In addition to what I just learned from the Chapter 13, I think that I develop a better understanding of writing. As the purpose of the chapter is to show us how we can start to write in the sciences. It is time to me to take seriously the writing and using certain good method in order to become a better writer.

   The reason I use this picture is because of the unfinish sentence remind me what I learned from all templates in "They Say/ I Say" and it makes me think what could be the next.. as in Chapter 13 invites us to start using scientific method in our writing.

Science in English

The writing covered in Chapter 13 was about scientific writing. Scientific writing is, in my opinion, a lot more difficult than anything we've written in class so far. Scientific writing is similar to our class essays because they make a claim and use evidence to support that claim. But it's more to scientific  writing than just that. Scientific writing makes a claim but they have to  also bring into question previous scientific arguments. They also use data as evidence but they have to analyze each piece of data and explain what it means and how that data supports or doesn't support their claim. They also have to explain how the data was collected and explain the end result of the data. In short, scientific writing goes into a deeper analysis of each part of their writing; nothing in scientific writing can go unexplained and you have to make your own argument about  what the scientific data is saying.

I don't think that I can use scientific writing in ENG 24 but I don't write about any science. But I do think that I can use the format of it. Scientific writing use of extreme analysis makes the paper easier to understand and can include all sides possible. Scientific writing cannot be written without a naysayer and that makes your paper more credible according to They Say/I Say.  So I believe that using the format of scientific writing in any paper will cause for an overall  better academic paper with good credibility.