Thursday, February 13, 2014

Snow, Snow, and More Snow!

Hey Class!

So obviously, the weather is crazy today, and I understand that some of you couldn't make it to class. No worries.

EXCEPT that I have your rough drafts, which you need to start revising! So, if you would like me to, I can try to scan and e-mail you your draft with my comments over the weekend. Just send me an e-mail before the end of the day saying you'd like me to do so, and I'll try to get to a library with a scanner tomorrow!

In the meantime, be sure to read either Chapter 13 or 14 from TSIS. Both are about the rules for writing in other fields of academia. Pick the one that seems more interesting or relevant to your major, read it, and be prepared to explain it to someone who picked the other chapter in class on Tuesday.

For bonus blog points, also write a post explaining how writing for the field you chose is different from the kinds of writing we tackled this semester. In other words, how could you take what you learned here and apply it to writing for a course in the field you chose? That will be due Tuesday, by 9am sharp!

Stay warm, be safe, and enjoy your long weekend!

Questions? Quibbles? Controversies?

PS As public transportation service is looking questionable, I'll be leaving office hours early today. If you're looking for me, e-mail me your questions, and we can chat over the weekend!

Have you ever heard of "Metacommentary"?? I haven't!

Don't you hate it when you are trying to write up an essay and to you, your point is clearly obvious!, but to your reader, not so much.  Using the art of Metacommentary, an author is able to single out a point and tell the reader that they are about to give the reason to what they are saying, or clearly specify the point they want to say.  Farhad Manjoo, the author of Is Facebook a Fad?, uses this to stress several points in his articles to let the reader know exactly the points he wants to make.  Two templates that this book use, which he uses that jump out at me are:
My point is not_______ but _____.
In other words, ______.
I also noticed he used two kinds of ways that I would use Metacommentary:
"This is what I meant when I said that the future of social networking was unpredictable."  By using the template that I put in bold, he is telling the reader to use the previous phrase to interpreter one of his main ideas.  I think this will help him by informing the reader exactly what to look for so that there is no chance of miss interpreting an idea.
"On the other hand, Google doesn't have access to the mother load of your social activity: stuff you post on Facebook itself, data that is closed off to mining from most other companies online."  The author is trying to inform the reader that he is not trying to be biased and giving the apposing argument to the point he is trying to convey.  This will defiantly strengthen what Mr. Manjoo is saying because it shows the reader that he isn't only looking at it from one point of view, but from multiple.  Respect for someone can go a long way, and by giving apposing ideas earns accreditation.

“But Don’t Get Me Wrong”-The Art of Metacommentary


In your main text you say something-claim, and the metacommentary text is commenting on your own claim telling readers and others how and how not to read you text- explaining your claim

Why do you need to use metacommentary?

1)      As clearly and great you write the readers can fail to understand/misinterpret your writing. Therefore, we should use metacommentary to clarify our points.

2)      It helps us make our writing longer and develop our ideas more deeply.

What else can be metacommentary?

Titles-most important metacommentary because it tells the readers what they’re expected to read…

Subtitles- elaborates and further explains the titles

Entertaining objections

Framing quotations

Transitions- helps explain the relationship between different claims

Answering “so what?” and “who cares?” questions – explain who is the audience and why


Exercise 1:

Does she use metacommentary? Yes

You can see the use of metacommentary in the article “Thinking Outside of the Thinking Box” by Dana Stevens in her first paragraph. She uses metacommentary to let us know she is summarizing Johnson’s claim. First she says “if” hinting us that there will be friction between 2 things. She introduces us to the author and claim she is arguing against. We can tell she is arguing/ disagreeing based on the words “I could make no sense...” She summarizes for us by saying “as far as I can tell” Johnson’s views and then tells us her view by saying “in other words...”


“If watching TV really makes you smarter, as Steven Johnson argued in an article in yesterday's New York TimesMagazine (an excerpt from his forthcoming book) then I guess I need to watch a lot more of it, because try as I might, I could make no sense of Johnson's piece. As far as I can tell, his thesis is that television shows have slowly grown more and more complicated over the last two decades (this paradigm shift apparently having begun with Hill Street Blues, the Gutenberg Bible of the smart-TV era), so that now, like rats in a behaviorist's maze, trained viewers can differentiate among up to 12 distinct plotlines in shows like The Sopranos. (The technical term for this great leap forward in human cognition: "multi-threading.") In other words, if I understand correctly, watching TV teaches you to watch more TV—a truth already grasped by the makers of children's programming like Teletubbies, which is essentially a tutorial instructing toddlers in the basics of vegging out.” (Stevens)

Does she follow the templates from TSIS? One of them – “in other words” (which alerts readers about an elaboration of a previous point. The rest of the tmplates she uses are not the same but similar.

I think Stevens use of metacommentary enhances her article because it clarifies her argument and Johnsons argument in a precise manner so that readers can understand her writing better, her argument and how her points connect.

Wednesday, February 12, 2014

Valuable Information

While I was reading this chapter, every paragraph I had a constant thought if I did my essay in a right way of if I used “metacomentary”. Going back to the article “Creating the Myth” by Linda Seger, I went back and forth over the article again, I didn’t find exactly the sentence that were used in Chapter 10, but Seger always went back to her point and provided new evidence of her work. In addition to that, it helps the reader go more in depth with the text and see the clear point that the author makes. Going back to my essay, of course my essay isn’t good at all and I know that but I will definitely work on it harder to prove all my points and provide the reader with evidence and why I am writing this. From my point of view I have provided a good title to my essay, I won’t think the reader will find something different in my essay from the title. In my thoughts I don’t think I’ve provided the road map for the reader, but in my introduction I’ve provided all the work that will be used in there, and in thesis statement I gave a good explanation of what my topic will be about. However, I don’t use metacomnetary in my further work, I’ve explained what the article is about and I connected it to the pop culture. My mistake was that I didn’t use metacomentary in my naysayer; I feel that the reader will think that may be I’ve lost my point.  I went back to my essay now and I’ve noticed that I actually proved my points but them seem to be very long and the reader may go off the track from my essay. I think my text is long enough, but I still have to use metacomentory. This chapter was very helpful, it much easier to go back my essay and search for exact mistakes.

Use of templates in making metacomntary in my essay: “This point should be of interest to anyone who studies films and how through these films we see the influence of one person to another, and how can we apply sometimes these legends and myths to our real life. The relationship that is drawn between the reality and the myth, people who studies our minds, our behavior our reaction to our environment, and I think anyone could find the correlation between myths, heroes, legends stories and use them in life. And on the other hand there could real stories from our time our past that can be told differently but the message is the same”.  Consider Linda Seger, for example. She provides us with the evidence my why tend to like myth stories and she explains as we all grew in one culture from our birth we have been taught to these myth, sometimes they make our life to be more colorful and inspirational.
Metacommentary

     Metacommentary is a style used by a writer to help the reader understand what s/he is saying.  These include warding off misunderstandings; elaborating; roadmap showing where one is from and where is headed; moving from a general claim to a specific; indicating importance of a claim; explanation when the writer expects objection and wrapping up issues. To complete the exercise, I will refer to “Hidden Intellectualism” by Gerald Graff.
     Graff uses metacommentary like transitions where he uses “whereas” and sums up by using “in short.” He also uses general claim, for example, he says he hated books and cared only for sports. But above all he has elaborated a lot in the essay using more words to explain the previous sentence like, “…the fact that we associate those street smarts with anti-intellectual concerns. (We associate the educated life, the life of the mind, too narrowly and exclusively with subjects and texts that we consider inherently weighty and academic”) (elab).
     Yes, the author uses word for word when he sums up saying, “In short, I was your typical…” and also “School competition, in short, reproduced…” – the word used are “in short.”
     Other forms of metacommentary are used in the essay. To sum up he has used “Consequently, I failed to see…” He has also anticipated objection and has used different ways to explain;
          -To be sure, school contained…
          -But if this argument suggests why…
          -If I am right, then schools and colleges…
All these can be used in similar sentence constraction.
     The authors use of metacommentary has enhanced his writing making such a scholarly writing to be engaging. To put it another way, he has elaborated almost all the sentences he has written. My conclusion then is that as informative as the essay is, he has opened it up giving the reader room to both understand and reflect on the issues at hand.    

Tuesday, February 11, 2014

Bonus Blogs and Possible Class Cancellation/Make-Up

First, a reminder that the opportunity to post about the Charles Dickens biography film The Invisible Woman is still available until either the film simply isn't playing in the city any more or the last day of class--Wednesday, February 19th.


As requested, the bonus blog opportunity for this week will be Exercise #1 from Chapter 10 of They Say / I Say. Answer the 5 questions asked about one of your critical or scholarly sources for Essay #3! The post will be due Thursday by 9am, and late posts will not be counted!

Finally, the administration has passed on that if classes are cancelled on Thursday, February 13th, due to inclement weather, we may make up those classes on Friday, February 14th! Check the Kingsborough website to be certain! It is important that should this happen, you make effort to come to class so that I may return your rough drafts and you have the long weekend to revise your essays. Otherwise, you won't get them back until Tuesday, February 18th--two days before the final is due!

Questions? Quibbles? Controversies?

Monday, February 10, 2014

Why are films for Latinos bad ? Oral presentation

Why are so many films for Latinos bad?

Written by a homosexual man named by the name of Alfonso Duralde , he examines holloywoods tendency to make " dreadful movies for Latinos ".

In the text Duralde explains that film industries are not producing "popular/ top rated " films that involve Latinos or a Latino theme. And that the movies that are produced towards the Latino community are not appealing to Latinos , but however degrading towards them.

Latinos don't want a film that will degrade them but connect with them and entertain them.

However Latinos aren't the only group that suffer with this problem of stereo types but other ethnicities two , such as African Americans and whites .

Issues that are discussed in films that are bad for Latinos are border wars and things that are happening with drugs and violence or problems with gangs.
With Issues like these being brought up in films , Duralde explains that it seems too give Latinos a bad reputations .

Duralde also states that most Latino themed movies are mostly not produced or made by Latinos themselves , which provides a different cultural perspective or direction towards how characters are portrayed or how the movies are brought out in many films for Latinos.

For example :
Duralde uses and compares a famous African American producer by the name of Tyler perry as being highly successful when it came to films that he directed towards hiss cultural backround. Not only were these films successful but these films were good for African Americans to see cause the films didn't degrade and pinpoint things about them but entertained them with things that valued their cultural background. But because Tyler perry is an African American himself he was able to make a film that didn't portray the African American lifestyle without being degrading.

One example of a good Latino film is "mi familia".This movie was written and directed by a Latino . In this movie the director focuses more on the values of a Latino family , rather then the stereotypes Latinos are given in society. Not only was the movie written by a Latino but each character played is Latino . My uncle plays the main charcter of the movie.



*show mi familia trailer *

My Family trailer (mi familia) - YouTube
www.youtube.com/watch?v=wKC4vXbUmpE

Final Essay Draft


Maritza Crespo

Professor Villarreal

ENG 24

 February, 2014

Think Before You Act

            When we heard words like recession and debt it gives us anxiety almost immediately. This is an issue that it is practically unavoidable for individuals. It has always being a battle throughout civilization; between money lenders and pledgers. Sadly, always resulting in the thrashing of the anemic. I have the confidence that this essay will give you a strong knowledge of how sociality suffers when particular set of groups do not play a fair game.

            Margaret Atwood was born in Ottawa, Ontario, Canada, in 1939. She is known as a fiction writer. She has also taught literature and writing in universities in the United States and Canada. In the article "Debtor's Prim" she claims that debts are something that is carried out from time to time. As well it has also left historical records in culture. Therefore, for any debt you have is a story left behind. How you go into debt, what you did to get out of debt, and what you did to deal with it. In “Debtors Prism” Margaret Atwood links a fiction story with today’s pop culture using "A Christmas Carol" and also including articles from today's pop culture. To explain “Debtors Prism.” Margaret Atwood claims that:      

 “Indulging in grinding, usurious financial practices is a spiritual sin as well as a cold indifference to the needs and suffering of others and imprison the sinner within himself “(Atwood 41)

             Margaret Atwood supports this idea by compering. "A Christmas Carol" by Charles Dickens with the crisis we are facing as a community. Scrooge is a greedy men that falls in love with money and without knowing money will become an idol in his life. He is obsess with collecting money and he does not care for the people that he continually hurt. During the nights, he was visited by the Christmas past, present, and future ghost. Scrooge goes into these different times to reflect on his life. Scrooge learns that if he would be better off dead than to continue on being greedy because of all the people he took advantage of. Scrooge probably did not know that he made a pact with the devil, but what we are sure of is that the author knew it. This happened to Scrooge and it almost cost him his life. Atwood’s proves her claim because she showed debts are a reality that goes generations to generation, and she uses a fiction story to reflect her claim in today’s pop culture.
Unfortunately, many nation are suffering with debt today. And it is so much so that, there are getting into a deeper debts to the point that countries are facing recession. In the summer of 2009 Aaron Mattis wrote in the Harvard International Reviews and article name “Running on empty Mongolia’s economic crash.” This article is base in the fact that because America is facing and economic crisis. Other countries economics are being shaken. Mongolia like many other countries has taken direct loans to avoid spreading economic pressure. Before the crisis increased, Mongolia was growing fast. The demands of superfluity cloth and blooming of the mining sector skyrocketed from 2005 to 2008. Mongolia started taking more loans because, the fast growing demands. And then inflation levels surpass the limit of lending money. Leaving the government with no other option; than to raise interest rates and taxes. So that it will be more difficult to obtain loans. The decision taken by the government cause Mongolians goods prices to drop a 50 percent founding themselves incapable to repay their debts and unable to obtain more credit.
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Work Cited

 Mattis, Aaron. "Running on empty Mongolia's economic crash." Harvard International Review 31.2 (2009): 10+. Academic OneFile. Web. 8 Feb. 2014.

Atwood, Margaret. ”Debtor’s Prism.” Reading Pop Culture Anthology. Ed ousborn. Boston: Bedford St. Martin’s. 2013. 36-42. Print